Ocean Visit
Slate grey sky reflected in wide open sea
Which crashes angry against the shore,
Foaming white before gurgling away.
You say, “We made a decision,” and
Tears flow unchecked down three sets of rosy,
Salty cheeks. Now questions stream forth like
The clear, fresh creek disappearing into
Ocean. “Where will we live? Where will Dad?”
Now our footsteps crunch against the rocky
Shore as we make our way to the car.
My first visit to the ocean, overcast –
Sun fading into night. Headlights pierce through fog.
Now I eat marshmallows and press against
My sisters’ bodies in the backseat as
We watch the dark roll past our cloudy windows.
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Michael said,
December 10, 2008 at 7:09 am
it’s so ominous! lol
i really like this piece, most of all because it uses the sensory image of the ocean (tumultuous and yet peaceful) to convey the emotional dynamic. excellent.
Gabriel Gadfly said,
February 8, 2009 at 8:06 pm
Wow. I think this is my favorite of your works that I’ve read, so far. Very powerful, but I love how you leave it up to the reader to determine what just occurred. I see two parents telling a child that they (the parents) are divorcing.
uncleverone said,
September 4, 2009 at 5:52 am
Fantastic work. I like your writing very much.